Mother: New Story Updates (Script, Character Bio, Scene Analysis for Class)

Scratched the VR idea — This is draft two of Mother (new idea).

Script: Mother (妈的) Draft 2

Short synopsis:

Widowed Margaret loves her son to the point of spoiling him. With no husband and a fear of dying alone, she obsesses over prospective grandchildren. After walking in on her son and his male friend in a misleading situation, she sets her mind to secretly turn him to the straight path using dubious methods.

Character Bio:

Margaret Lai, late 40s – 50s

Serious, naive and slightly neurotic — a typical Singaporean auntie with kiasuism attached. She’s smothered her son all her life but does so more now that she is widowed. Her dream is to be able to see her grandchildren (via Raymond) and live out her last days being cared for like how she has always done so for Raymond.

Raymond Lai, late 20s

Raymond’s too used to being spoiled that he doesn’t know hard work. He spends his time locked in his room surfing the web and playing games. A socially awkward shut-in who prefers life in 2d over real people. Because of his upbringing, he’s lazy and unsociable.


Raymond’s close friend from his teenage years. They never really matured much. Usually, he goes over to Raymond’s to play games and hang out.

Prostitute, 20s-30s

Pastor Richard, 50s

Scene Analysis for Thursday’s class (22/09): 

In this scene, Raymond has suffered the brunt of his mother’s strange antics. He’s paranoid and wary of her, so when she enters the room, his full defenses are up because he doesn’t trust her anymore.

Margaret’s goal in this scene is get Raymond to understand her and try to calm him down from the previous events. The whole heart-to-heart talk on the bed is her goal to present her views on grandchildren and her love of her son to Raymond. And to justify the next big event… the prostitute’s entrance.

When the prostitute arrives, of course the soothed Raymond flares up again at his mother’s shenanigans and just leaves the room and house.


Story Idea: Love Virtually


It’s win or die for an amateur-in-love who must get the girl or he’ll remain stuck in a Dating Simulation game forever.


Raymond has never had a girlfriend in his life. Forget girlfriends — as a socially stunted adult, the only girl he can ever communicate with without melting into a sputtering puddle is his 60 year-old co-worker at the café, Auntie Irene. On his birthday, sympathetic Auntie Irene (who has noticed his epic failure at serving female diners) gives him a weird present that looks like a porn dvd with a bracelet: She tells him it’s “LOVE VIRTUALLY,” a Dating Simulation game meant to train amateurs into successful Don Juans. That’s how she found her boyfriend.

Having no one to celebrate his birthday with, skeptical Raymond boots up the game on his PC and straps on the simulation bracelet. He blacks out and awakens to a techni-colour world. A girl stands before him; her face not quite clear as it switches to different faces each second, the sound of a countdown timer beeping in the background. When the timer hits 0, the girl’s face-changing roulette stops to show a feisty brunette, the words floating above her reads “Elodie”. Her name.

A Narrator’s voice explains how the simulation has picked the most suitable girl for him based on personality analysis (although Raymond is intimidated by her; she’s definitely not his type). The Narrator then lists the game’s rules: 1. He has to win the heart of Elodie and make her his girlfriend. 2) He only has three tries – if he fails all, he can’t leave the game. 3) Only he can hear his Narrator.

Panicked Raymond tries his hand at dating to save his life, but fails the first two times. Elodie seems to be a self-aware character. She can remember the events of his previous failure and tells him off for only caring about winning the game and not her heart. Raymond gives up trying to win the game. He attempts to cheer Elodie up on the third date, going to places and doing fun things without agendas. They both seem to have a good time — Raymond is happier here than in real life — and they tell each other about themselves (e.g. his job, his fears etc). In the end, Raymond tells her he doesn’t mind staying in the game if she’ll be his friend. Elodie smiles, touched. She gives him a virtual heart from her pocket, and says he has won the game. Raymond wakes, back to dreary reality.

The next day at work, he is shocked to see Elodie in real life, who greets him at the counter.

Elodie: “Why don’t we start off as friends first?”

Raymond is too shocked for words.

Elodie laughs and splutters, “I still seriously can’t believe you thought it was all a game the whole time. Love Virtually is a dating program!”


Additional Comments/Ideas:

Planning to shoot Raymond’s workplace at ADM’s cafe. As for the dating places, most likely a park, some other cafe(?), and maybe a playground.

Real life has a grey tinge, the scenes will be more desaturated. The game life will be vibrant and whimsical, and if possible, maybe using wide angle lens to show the distortion in reality. The narrator (who’s actually one of the many program operators for Love Virtually) will comment on Raymond’s progress during the game and mess with him.

Also still working out the kinks of the three tries and what Raymond will do for each date. Suggestions or critique very much welcome!