This is gold.
This is gold.
mostly shortened the parts like digging into pockets and form thrown on the bed.
I did not remove the close up shots of him pulling the ring out as I tested it and found the shots to be better with than without.
I’ve also edited the shot of the boy talking the hamburger to look more seemless.
For the first flashback scene I’m considering having the piano piece be misplayed intentionally when he gets more nervous which would give the father reason for him to cane his son
I don’t think I will include the father saying anything to his son, maybe more of a beautiful music pice played across the visuals to symbolise harmony between father and son
Hi guys attached below is the second cut of my short film.
I’ve shorten some segments and cut off unnecessary segments. Do take a look and give feedback 🙂 Thanks.
I’ve put up the actor’s CV, Shotlist and Final Script here should anyone need it for reference.
Jon: played by Marshall Poh
Young Jon: played by Jared Aiden Lim
Attached below is the link to my Rough Cut for my short film, Metronome.
Please feel free to give me your comments! Thanks!
This files has been:
Down Res from 4k to 720p
No ADR/ Foley added yet
No Color Grading Applied
There is no proper sound in place yet, I will add it later, now it is only camera audio.
Art D & Sound: Phoebe
Gaffer and B-camera: Ken Ng
LOCATION (2): Singapore Polytechnic. The Interlace, 200 Depot Road, 109706
CONTACT: Director Alex: 9320 0698, or Producer Lauren: 9070 7984
0900 call time
0930 – 1230 – Hospital @ Signaproe Polytechnic Scenes
1230 – 1430 – Move to Interlace & Lunch
1430 – 1600 – Vending Machine Scenes
1600 – 1830 – Carpark smoking scene
1830 – 1900 – Dinner
1900 – 2200 – Piano Scene
Aged 28, Chinese.
Jon is a beaten man, heavily burdened with the choice to terminate the life support off his comatose father. He has a great disdain for his father who was abusive to him when he was young, caning him whenever he misplayed the piano.
He is emotionally scarred by the piano practices with his father, which consciously haunts his life and behavior. Despite the negative emotions he feels towards his father, he ultimately remembers the good times with him.
Back-story (Not in film)
Jon is a talented struggling musician, who is up to his neck in debt. He spends his days playing keyboard for pubs and nightclubs, looking for his big break. His indebted state is self-inflicted, being involved in the many vices a popular musician would face.
50s – 60s, Chinese.
Jon’s Father is a strict no nonsense father, who believes in ruling his son with an iron fist. He is unapologetic for the way he raises Jon even though most might see his methods as overly harsh and brutal. Despite all this however, he does show his affection for his son in his own subtle way.
Attached here is the scene analysis for the Carpark Scene
Total shots: 6
Reference Image for Scene