mostly shortened the parts like digging into pockets and form thrown on the bed.
I did not remove the close up shots of him pulling the ring out as I tested it and found the shots to be better with than without.
I’ve also edited the shot of the boy talking the hamburger to look more seemless.
For the first flashback scene I’m considering having the piano piece be misplayed intentionally when he gets more nervous which would give the father reason for him to cane his son
I don’t think I will include the father saying anything to his son, maybe more of a beautiful music pice played across the visuals to symbolise harmony between father and son
Hi guys attached below is the second cut of my short film.
I’ve shorten some segments and cut off unnecessary segments. Do take a look and give feedback 🙂 Thanks.
I’ve put up the actor’s CV, Shotlist and Final Script here should anyone need it for reference.
Jon: played by Marshall Poh
Young Jon: played by Jared Aiden Lim
Attached below is the link to my Rough Cut for my short film, Metronome.
Please feel free to give me your comments! Thanks!
This files has been:
Down Res from 4k to 720p
No ADR/ Foley added yet
No Color Grading Applied
There is no proper sound in place yet, I will add it later, now it is only camera audio.
Attached here is the scene analysis for the Carpark Scene
Total shots: 6
Reference Image for Scene