Version 1:
Version 2:
I originally submitted version 1 thinking the deadline was earlier where in my initial OSS post, I lamented that if I had more time I would have added more details in and re-did some of the panels. Turns out, I HAD!
Having to do two pages, I really wanted each page to be distinct but with a purpose. The first page is meant to evoke a sense of familiarity/ recalling back to a specific time, hence the more “refined” approach with the shading, where the overall look is meant to look cleaner in comparison to page 2. For this version, I changed the last panel entirely because I found the first version’s to be uninteresting and did have the dramatic effect I wanted because the “camera” is pointing to the ground where it would’ve had been better if it was pointing upwards. The scenery is completely changed because I drew the 2nd version when I was at home, where the first was from my hall. For this page, I took inspiration from Mattero Pericoli , I noticed that although his work doesn’t necessarily has tone in the traditional sense, he makes up for it with the windows and bricks which in a way acts as its tones.
For page two, I wanted it to contrast, not only with the amount of darks I use but the overall composition as well, it’s lot more rougher and boxed in (which is beyond my comfort zone to be honest, but I wanted to be a little more experimental). The intention is ground page 2 more into reality in contrast to the more nostalgic approach I took in page 1. I changed the overall aesthetic for this page because I felt the first version was dull and lacked a distinct personality. Hence I tightened up the framing to give it a more “boxed” in feeling, which fits well into the new narrative of being unable to escape from something despite being self-aware. I changed this narrative because when I showed that to my friends, they were confused by the conflicting imagery as the monologue talked about food, but the visuals showed a completely different food. This would have worked better if the monologue and drawings were different enough. Hence, the change, which I feel works better. I also decided to ink it to make it more bold and gross to contrast the cleaner look of page 1 better (plus I also had fun inking page 1 and wanted to continue doing it haha). For this page, I took inspiration from Andre Wee , which was introduced by Noah’s post as the ones I picked weren’t “messy” enough.. but I guess that is the point of having us introduce each other various artists!
Class drawings:
Not sure if we’re required to reflect but I’ll just do it anyways cause it feels weird posting class drawings without sharing some thoughts.
To be honest, I failed to keep up the habit of drawing during the semester break because of various reasons and commitments, which was why I decided to take up this module, to help me get back into it as well as to build on the foundation from year 1.
In the first drawing, my proportions are all over the place, and sketching them without line work made it even harder, which made me worried if this was the kind of output I’d have for every class so I squeezed in some time, whenever I can, to focus on anatomy and get back into the habit of sketching them quickly. Hence the vast improvement seen in picture 2 (at least I hope..).
The biggest challenge posed is definitely the environment, while foundation year has helped me gotten a lot better at drawing people, I still had difficulty plotting the environment quickly. I consulted with prof Jesse on image 3 and have gotten lots of useful feedback that I kept in mind in subsequent classes (and especially for the final assignment). Some of these advises includes; don’t commit to a single object until I’ve laid out the environment, draw my ellipses properly and use the eraser as a drawing tool and not just a tool to undo mistakes.
Still have ways to go but am pleased by the overall improvements I’ve made this semester.
