I have updated my assignment and my story. This is a different story from the one which I have presented for my third assignment. Apologies guys you might need to read the synopsis again.

Myth used: Saul’s transition to become Paul. He was a persecutor of Christians, until one day
God appeared before him and blinded him for three days. During his blindness, he saw
His wrong-doings and decided to change his way of life and belief.

Inspiration: My own personal experience.


Peter and Dave are brothers. They were inseparable. They would eat together, hang out together and do their work together. When they eat, Peter would always pick the food for Dave. When they study, Peter would always use objects which Dave can feel to illustrate certain points. When they play, Peter would always let Dave win, to give him his sense of pride and confidence. They were so close that Peter shared many things with Dave, and one day Peter passed Dave a glass bottle containing a note which he instructed him not to open until he was told to do so. They led an otherwise ordinary life.

Except, that is, Dave is blind.

However, Peter took little notice of that. To him, Dave is his brother, no matter what happens to him. He will still eat with him, do work with him and play with him until the end of the world.

Or so he thought.

It wasn’t long before things start to change. Due to his disability, Dave had to attend a separate school from Peter. He had to learn how to read with his fingers, groping around the textbook and using his sense of touch instead of his sense of sight. Despite his inability to see and observe the things around him, Dave did not become withdrawn to himself. Instead, he viewed the world with optimism. Because he was not blessed with his sense of sight, he was grateful for everything else that was his; his sense of touch, his parents, and above all, his brother.

Peter, on the other hand, changed for the worse. He took what he have for granted. Because he attended a normal school, he was exposed to people who did not have disability. And some of them were mean and obnoxious in their own way. When they went over to his house, they discovered that Peter has a blind brother. Gradually, over time, they began teasing Dave for his disability, mimicking his groping actions as he was looking for something and hiding his things so that he would have to grope around the room to look for it.

Peter resented this behaviours initially, but he did not want to feel like an outcast to his friends. He did not join in the teasing for his brother, instead he kept a distance from him, as if his condition is infectious. Slowly, a void grew between them, and Peter started spending lesser and lesser time with Dave. Dave felt the ramifications of his brother’s spoiled friends and how they have affected him. He tried pulling Peter away from them, emphasising on how they have changed him. Peter was no longer then man that he once was.

Where was the brother who promised to be by his side throughout his life?

Peter, instead of seeing enlightenment in his brother’s words, flew into rage. He ranted about how Dave was a burden to him. How he was a disgrace to him in front of his friends. And how he regretted ever calling Dave his brother. Dave was stunned. He stood on the spot for a long time, going over the words which Peter had said, long after he had walked away.

Something was broken between them. The bond, that brotherhood. It was gone.

However, it was not long before something tragic happened.

While Peter was hanging out with his gang of friends one night, he was knocked over by a car.

He survived the accident, but was crippled by it. He felt hopeless, despair and grief all washing over him at once. For the first time in his life, he felt that it was better to die than to live this way.

His friends all vanished at this, and he was left alone. All alone. Until Dave came and pulled him out of the darkness. It was a slow process, not just the healing of his leg, but also rekindling of the kinship between them. Dave would help Peter carry his bag on this way to school, and helped Peter around the house. It was awkward, to be the one who required assistance. The roles have reversed. It was Peter’s turn to receive help from Dave now, but Dave did not mind it one bit.

As the days passed, Peter saw what Dave was referring to when he asked him to stay away from his school friends; they were only there for him because of what he has for them; of his money and companionship. Not who he really was inside. Dave had seen what Peter had missed, even though he was blind; he saw the truthfulness of someone, he saw the value for who they really were, instead of their exterior appearance. Peter was truly grateful to Dave for opening his eyes for him. He was Peter once more.

Peter’s friends, however, resented as being pushed off the podium by his blind brother. They were still his friends, were they not? Their hatred was compound by their initial dislike for him and they decided to hatch a plot to put Dave in a hospital.

As Dave was walking home one night, he heard the sound a screeching car just meters away. It was waiting for him to turn up. But as he was blind, he could not see how fast the car the coming, and where it was headed. Instead he just stood there, hoping that the car would pass without hitting him. Suddenly, a heavy force slammed into him. Who was that? It felt like a bag of muscles had pushed him violently of the way. Dave crashed to the ground just an ear-splitting screech came from the car that just whooshed past him and collided, eerily, with a body.

David was walking around the garden, gently pushing his leg to walk an extra mile to hasten the recovery, when he heard the car coming. It looked way to familiar. When it burst into speed, David caught the figure in its headlights. It was Dave. Without hesitating a moment, he leapt into action. In a fraction of a second, he crossed over to the road and violently shoved Dave aside.

Just then, he injured leg gave way, and he fell helplessly to the ground. He turned and saw the driver’s shocked face as the car ate up the distance between them, he heard the brakes slam, but it was too late. All remembered with a flash of blinding white light.

When he came to, he was gasping for breath. The arms holding him were soft and smooth, like that of his brother’s. Through ragged breathe and half-blinded eyes, he glimpse a rough outline of his brother. He tried to reach out to him, but his arms wouldn’t move. Come on! Move it! He thought furiously, but they just flopped limply on the ground.

Between breathes, he whispered to Dave’s ear

“Open…Open the note I gave you”

And he was no more.

A few days after the incident, Dave found the note Peter has passed onto him. It was originally in the bottle which Peter had given him, but he had smashed it in rage during their previous argument.

With trembling hands, he asked his parents what it contained.

In between tears, their parents recited the note.

“Dear Dave, if I were to die one day, I would to give my eyes to you. You deserve to see this beautiful world much more than I do. Love, Peter”

3 acts structure.
First act:

Our hero Peter leads an ordinary life. He has a loving brother, and he gives the best of what he has to his brother.

Second act:

Peter was misled by his friends. They twist his opinion about his brother. Instead of seeing him as someone in need, he saw him as someone who is weighing him down. He affiliates lesser and lesser with his brother.

Third act:

Through his accident, Peter saw who the indispensable people in his life are. It was his brother who stuck to him through his darkest moments, whilst his friends kept their distance. Peter came out of his reverie and returned to his old self once more; the kind, caring and compassionate brother he was.

Plot twist:

Peter’s friends were jealous because Dave has taken Peter’s attention away from them. They plotted revenge. But Peter, having changed because of David, saw that happening and lost his life to save his brother.